Can you check my grammer please?

its in my essay to get into honors english





For example, for my 12th birthday she bought me a picture with purple flowers and sweet swirls for my bedroom that says “Believe in yourself and the magic will happen”.

Can you check my grammer please?
It is a bit of a run on. Also, there needs to be a comma before the quotes and the period at the and needs to be inside the quotes. Consider this revision.


For example, for my 12th birthday she bought me a picture for my bedroom. It shows purple flowers, sweet swirls, and it says, "Believe in yourself and the magic will happen."
Reply:It is grammar.
Reply:For example, for my 12th birthday she bought me a picture with purple flowers and sweet swirls for my bedroom that says “Believe in yourself and the magic will happen”.








I think it might be "For my twelfth birthday, she bought me..."
Reply:I'll check your spelling too. It's "grammar."
Reply:[It is a bit of a run on. Also, there needs to be a comma before the quotes and the period at the and needs to be inside the quotes.]





Consider this revision:





For example, ON my 12th birthday she bought me a picture for my bedroom. It's a lovely display of purple flowers and sweet swirls, paired with the quote, "Believe in yourself and the magic will happen."
Reply:If you can't spell grammar you shouldn't be in an honors english program.
Reply:Firstly, it's grammar*, not grammer.





I would put ...a picture for my bedroom...


'Believe in yourself, and the magic will happen'
Reply:For example, for my twelfth birthday, she bought me a picture with purple flowers and sweet swirls for my bedroom which reads “Believe in yourself and the magic will happen”.



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